
PHOTO PROMPT © J Hardy Carroll
Title: Broken Promises
Source: Friday Fictioneers sponsored by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields-Addicted to Purple
Word count: 100 words
Gabriella’s hands clutched the icy iron pickets, her heart pounded as she stared at the house, hoping for a sign. Birds chirped, and wind caressed her cheek flipping her hair across her face. Nothing else moved.
She waited until her hands turned blue and her body trembled in the frigid air. The truth seeped from the dark corners of her mind, gathering speed until the iron freight train blasted the words she feared from the start. He wasn’t coming.
It was all a lie. Gabriella turned away from the future he had so sweetly promised and walked to the river.
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Jo Hawk The Writer
Beautifully written. The hint of walking towards the river with its unwritten conclusion was heartbreaking.
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Thank you. Glad you liked it.
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Touchingly sad. You captured well her realisation and disappointment.
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Thanks.
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Poor girl. Well told —and oft-told—tale.
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Thanks, it does seem to happen too often.
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I guess guys have their own tales of the one who promised and never showed up, though with guys it tends to rather be, “We got married and two years later she took me to the cleaners.”
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🙂
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I hope something stops her on the way to that river. Life is too precious to throw away because of one liar.
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Who knows? Maybe her home is on the other side.
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Sad to see the disappointment she faced. But that is life sometimes.
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Disappointment lurks around every corner. It is how we respond to it. Thank you for commenting.
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Oh so beautiful and haunting!
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Thank you for reading.
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Dear Jo,
Hauntingly sad piece. Wonderful descriptions. I shivered with her.
Welcome to Friday Fictioneers.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thank you. I am honored to be among such talent.
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Truly sad… poor thing.. Does she not know there are better fish in the sea than the liar she wants?
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Youth. Perhaps she will get lucky and find a good man. 🙂
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I should like to think so!
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The hope and the heartbreak – something we can all relate to in life. I love the subtly hinted ending. Nicely done.
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Thank you.
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Bloody men!
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🙂
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Ah, that poor girl. Maybe, on her way to the river, she overcomes her despair and finds her anger. That guy needs to be kicked, not cried over.
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LOL we can only hope she will discover she has a backbone.
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