Independence Day – Friday Fictioneers

Title: Independence Day
Source:  Friday Fictioneers sponsored by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields-Addicted to Purple
Word count: 100 words

PHOTO PROMPT © J Hardy Carroll

Lottie watched her father methodically shovel forkfuls of biscuits slathered with sausage gravy into his mouth. She never understood how he breathed, chew and swallow without choking on his food.

“Not, hungry?” he gestured towards Lottie’s plate with his loaded fork.

Her nose wrinkled and she tried to ignore the spittle and half-chewed food, as his fork found its mark.

“I’m not going to college,” Lottie blurted.

His face reddened as he choked, coughed and sputtered, swigging water he regained his normal coloring.

“Best eat your breakfast. It’ll be the last meal I’ll pay for.”

“I know,” she said.


Keep on writing.

Jo Hawk The Writer

45 thoughts on “Independence Day – Friday Fictioneers

  1. A good and well-written story, Jo. You really brought that slob to life. She might have more than one reason for moving out, but if he was paying for college and I was living free, it would have had to be something much more than him being a slob before I wouldn’t have stuck it out. When my son left home to live with friends right after high school, my daughter said he was dumb. She didn’t move out to live closer to the college with friends until her senior year of college. 😀 — Suzanne

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  2. Well, THAT took an unexpected turn! I was all grossed out by the spittle and mess in Dad’s mouth, so that the “I’m not going to college” thing took me completely by surprise. Well done 🙂

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  3. I can so picture this scent, Jo. You wrote it so well. I do imagine one would focus on everything whilst trying to find the courage to say what they wanted to – especially knowing it would not be well-received.

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