Title: The Watched
Source: Friday Fictioneers sponsored by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields-Addicted to Purple
Word count: 100 words

PHOTO PROMPT © Rochelle Wisoff-Fields
Josh scanned the area, ever vigilant. It was quiet. He saw no one. Still, they could be watching. They watched, long distance, and the Borg people made it easy. He tossed his pack watching it land. It thumped on solid ground. A final scan. Satisfied he climbed the railing, feet dangling he let go.
Under the bridge was everything he needed, clean water, a rock chair, and a place to sleep. The waterline said the flooding wouldn’t reach him. Content, he unpacked supplies from his pack and prepared his camp. In the daylight, he could sleep. Tonight, he would run.
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Keep on writing.
Jo Hawk The Writer
Interesting take on the photo prompt, Jo. Hope he stays safe!
Susan A Eames at
Travel, Fiction and Photos
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Thanks Susan. He seems crafty so he might be ok., 😊
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You hooked me here. Sometimes I wish serial stories were allowed.
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Ha, I was thinking there is much more to this story. We shall see. Thanks for reading. 😊
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his back story and future are like two story frames you have allowed the reader to fill with many an imaginative narrative – well done! i really enjoy flash like this, gets me thinking about plots and characters
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Always glad when a story stirs the imagination. It got me thinking too and if I didn’t already have a bunch on my plate I would be writing more on this. 😊 Glad you liked the story.
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there’s a special lure in short stories and not many can do this well or get it right for the reader, you did good!. liked it very much!
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Thank you my friend. 😊
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I’m wondering who are the Borg people? Is that a Star Trek reference?
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Yes, in part. It is a term I have found myself using from time to time and it seemed to fit here.
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Sounds like a rough life. Especially if it’s the Star Trek Borg who are after him…
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Interesting story.
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Thank you for reading and commenting Sandra. ❤
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Dear Jo,
This piece crackles with tension. Well done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thank you Rochelle. Glad you enjoyed it. 😊
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So much left to the imagination – well done.
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Thank you Clare. ❤
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I wonder what he’s running from? Intriguing.
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Something terrible I am sure. 😉
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The first paragraph hammers home the experience of constantly being under scrutiny. Nearly every sentence has a word having do with sight in it. Having set this context, you next show your character to be a sharp-witted doer, and we are instantly cheering for him.
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I am glad he evokes sympathy from you as the reader. Thank you for your comment, it is very helpful. ❤
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I like that this is a refuge for him after all the death…
Hope he manages to “resist”…
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A refuge for at least a short while. I think he will be fine. Glad you liked it. 😊
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Good he found a place he liked and he can pursue what he liked.
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For now. Thanks for reading and commenting. 😊
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Intriguing, why’s he on the run, who’s he running from. I like the sense that he has to be ultra cautious, any false move and he will be caught
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Thanks, Michael. Your comment is greatly appreciated. 😊
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What, or whom, was he running from?
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Something nefarious I am sure. Thanks for reading and commenting.
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it left me rooting for your hero. 🙂
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Oh, good. I am rooting for him too. Thanks for reading and commenting. 😊
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On the run. ‘They’, the Borgs, make this a dystopian hell.
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I would think so. 😉 Running is never fun. Thanks for commenting.❤
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He’s an interesting character experienced at assessing his surroundings and using them to serve his needs. A hardened fugitive maybe. I was immediately on his side even though I don’t know what or who he is fleeing. Well told.
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Thanks Jilly. Making an empathetic connection in so few words is always a challenge. Glad you thought it worked. Thanks for reading.
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You created a very suspenseful atmosphere. Well written story! =)
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Thank you for your kind words Brenda. 😊
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Great suspense, and quite believable!
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Thanks you for reading and commenting Linda
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Like a fuguitive, love the danger and suspense, great stuff
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Perhaps he is. Glad you liked the piece.
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I somehow think he would lead the rebellion at some point… he seem to have the right mindset.
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I don’t think he is without skills. He should fare well. Glad you liked the piece.
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The worst part is always the night. Lets hope he can get a fire going!
Great work with the story man 🙂 I liked that the amount of detail you out in really let the mind fill in the blanks. Sorry it took so long for me to get to reading it!
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Hey Jacob, no worries, this is the busy holiday season. 😉 I’m trilled that you stopped by to read and like the story. I am sure this guy will be fine, he seems pretty resourceful. 😊
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So interesting!
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😊
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