Title: Duped
Source: Weekend Writing Prompt #101 – Charlatan
Objective: Write a poem or piece of prose in exactly 61 words.
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Lola O’Neill stood, eyes shut, as the wind whipped, tugging her skirts.
The old woman was silent. Still, Lola waited. She willed the return of her world.
A gull cried overhead.
“Are you done?” she asked, “Am I home?”
The gull replied. She opened her eyes. The crone had taken her money, but Lola was no longer blind.
“Charlatan,” she screamed.
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Keep on writing.
Jo Hawk The Writer
So how did she get her sight back?
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Oh she was never blind. But she could not see she was being duped out of her money.
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I’m just wondering who the charlatan is if she was never blind in the first place…
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Looks like this piece is an epic fail, Dale. Her blindness came in believing the old woman could get her home with a spell. Therefore she, the old woman is the charlatan.
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Dang. It wasn’t. The comment you made to Larry threw me off. You said she was never blind. Sometimes we just don’t have enough words to play with! I would not classify this as epic fail at all. I should not have let the comments influence me.
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I think the issue is there is blind, and then there is blind. Sight vs. ability to see the truth. 61 words is not enought to delineate between the two.
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Exactly! I still applaud your attempt.
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Thank you, Dale. ❤
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❤
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61 words is a mighty challenge Jo. I can feel the story, the betrayal fore mostly, though the facts are vague.
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Thank you Gina. We will chalk this one up as a fail. 🙂
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i would not call it a fail, ambiguity has its merits, i think i write a lot of “fails”!! which is actually quite interesting on a re-read.
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I suppose that is what re-writes are for. 😊
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I think your piece was on spot, it didn’t lead me astray in the least. Sixty one words is a challenge when you are painting the intricate portrait you created here.. Very well done, Jo.
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Aw, thank you Violet. I am glad you enjoyed it. ❤
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