Go Bag, Go – Friday Fictioneers

Title: Go Bag, Go
Source:  Friday Fictioneers sponsored by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields-Addicted to Purple
Word count: 100 words


Maria swung her grocery bag, humming a tune as she hurried home. Turning the last corner, she halted, the grocery bag bumping her leg.

Parked in the space by her door, was Carlo’s scooter. Like old times, her heart raced, and bile chocked her throat.  Panicking, she scanned the courtyard and glanced at her upstairs window. Senses alert, she turned and ran.

“Oh god. Did he see me?” she wondered as she ran.

People stared, and she slowed her pace.

“Think, Maria. You have a plan.”

She retrieved the key from her purse.

“Train station. Left luggage locker. Destination unknown.”


Keep on writing.

Jo Hawk The Writer

29 thoughts on “Go Bag, Go – Friday Fictioneers

  1. I like the skillful way you shifted the mood from her carefree situation, with the little detail about the shopping bag bumping her leg, to the urgency at the end. Poor Maria to have her tranquility spoiled like that – but you’ve set her up as a survivor so that’s good.

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  2. Its interesting to ponder what their previous relationship was, so that she absolutely must escape before he sees her. My money’s on domestic abuse. But maybe she owes him money, or he is there to blackmail her with some embarrassing truth. Intriguing!

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